Three places i would like to visit in the world are, ireland, south korea and china. I would like to visit ireland because, that is where my grandpa was born.
Did you want to throw up when you read those last two sentences?!?!
If not, was it because grammar mistakes don’t bother you? Or was it because you didn’t even notice the errors??? Gaak! I deliberately made those four errors since they are of the type that I frequently see in your writing. And here they are: Google docs does not point out that “i” should always be capitalized as “I”; you should just know that by now. Also, the names of countries should always be capitalized. Always. I should never read “america”, “china”, “england”...they are proper nouns, people! The last two errors involve incorrect comma use. The first sentence contains a list: “...are, Ireland, …”. The words in the list can be separated by commas, but the list should never begin with a comma as you see it does as pointed out by the bold text. Lastly, take a look at this troubling issue: “...because, that is where…”. Dang it! Never use a comma after the word because! Whew. Now that I got that off my chest…
POSTS Your job is to show me that you have learned those simple grammar lessons. Give an example in your post of each of the four situations that I pointed out to you, at a clip of one point apiece. Each of the four must be underlined to show understanding and that you can follow directions (4 points). And what are you writing about? Let’s start with food, festivals and/or fun. Choose a country in South Asia and do some digging.
What are some different types of food that they eat there (that you may/may not easily be able to get here) that you might like to try...or just find to be BiZaRrE? Or explore some of the festivals that they might celebrate there and share what you learn. Or the fun part. What do kids do in those places for fun? How do they spend their time with friends? Because we are stronger writers now, Spelling-Error-Free POSTS must be 100+ words (4 points), contain a hyperlink or a video, or have a picture/video brought in to your post (1 point) and end with a question (1 point). Don’t forget your transitions! Blog on, young Padawans!
COMMENTS: You must be the first or second comment made to a post and it must now be 75+ words, spelling-error free of course (5 points), and once again it should clearly show that you have looked up information from the post and added it as part of your response (2 points). NEW this time...you must suggest to this author that they read another author's post. Connect your suggestion with a solid reason. For example you might say, "Hey Julio, I really liked reading your post about Sri Lanka and the amazing food they have there. It dawned on me that you might really like to read Darby's post. I know, I know...she wrote about Bengal, not Sri Lanka. But you will notice that each culture seems to share a love of spicy food, don't you agree?" See how I connected the two different posts by a common thread? That is your mission, and success there will earn you your final 3 points.
I personally have already got sick from eating a sushi from a restaurant in Florida, but I still love to eat foods from all over the world when I get the chance. You should check out Yoonho’s post It also talks about how you should be careful on some of the more unhealthy foods that you eat in Asia because it has a lot of sugar and fat. If I were you I would try and be more adventurous with what you eat.
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